Ah, my favorite part of the entire episode. I like how your fic focused on the XANA end (whereas my fic of the scene focused on William). I also like the XANA-Yumi pairing and there's not enough good fics out there :)

Love your writing style! Great job! As for the text, I think it is necessary...it eases us into the story instead of slamming us in the face. I wish I would have done something more like that with mine.