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Reviewer: Aelita Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 31, 2008 02:34 PM Title: Kazuya saves the day..???

Andrew...I bet. I got kind of lost. You didn't explain very well. But other than that...I guess it was okay. You're trying a little too hard to put the languages you know in the story. Don't worry about it.

Reviewer: Aelita Signed [Report This]
Date: Jul 31, 2008 02:32 PM Title: Lunch of Champions

Actually, you probably want to put "Je m'appelle Yumi" or "Je m'appelle Andrew" for the "je suis" part. You don't want to literally say "I am (je suis)"...French people don't speak like that.

Otherwise, somewhat short, but good :D

Reviewer: trixter 93 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Feb 08, 2008 05:26 AM Title: Lunch of Champions

i like it, kaz sounds funny!!!

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