Penname: metrunui1 [
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Real name: Warren Elsken
Member Since: Sep 12, 2006
Membership status: Member
Bio:
I am a high school student, gradualy working through stories of others and works of my own, without letting my grades slip. I also have psychotic parents and a job so it might take me a bit to get chapters up. I promise that I will get chapters up as soon as posible okay?
If you want to reply more then once to a story it would be appreciated, that way i know what i am doing wrong/right with that story!
PLEASE READ MY ONE SHOTS! I PUT AS MUCH EFFORT INTO THEM AS I DO FOR MY OTHER STORIES!
Beta-reader: Yes
Gender: male
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Summary: 
Emily centered oneshot."Hello, Yumi," she said, voice shaking slightly. "It's been a while hasn't it? Four years, in fact. You probably wouldn't even remember me now."
Categories: Ships Characters: Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed: Yes
Word count: 947
Read Count: 2153
Published: Dec 23, 2005 Updated: Dec 23, 2005
Summary: William is sick of waiting for Ulrich. XANA attacks. Yumi's life is thrown into chaos when everything changes and something unexpected happens.
Categories: Seasons >
Season 2 Characters: Aelita Hopper,
Jeremie Belpois,
Odd Della Robbia,
Sissi Delmas,
Ulrich Stern,
William Dunbar,
Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: Angst,
Drama,
General,
SuspenseWarnings: None
Challenges: A Novel Idea
Series: None
Chapters: 15
Completed: Yes
Word count: 1842
Read Count: 50215
Published: Sep 01, 2006 Updated: Sep 25, 2006
Summary: Everyone has their battles, their demons to fight. Some are just harder to tame than others. JY friendship, and slight romance, if you want to call it that.
Categories: Ships >
Jeremie and Yumi Characters: Jeremie Belpois,
Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed: Yes
Word count: 2157
Read Count: 1395
Published: Sep 01, 2006 Updated: Sep 01, 2006
Summary: Ulrich and Yumi are deeply in love and they can both release their feelings to one another, but Yumi has a few thing she has to tell Ulrich sooner or later. If you want to know more about the other couples, email me. THIS CONTAINS SEX SCENES IN LATER CHAPTERS, IF YOU ARE UNDER THE AGE OF 18, IT'S YOUR RESPONSIBILITY FOR READING, IT'S NOT MY FAULT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Categories: Ships Characters: Aelita Hopper,
Jeremie Belpois,
Odd Della Robbia,
Ulrich Stern,
Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8
Completed: No
Word count: 1252
Read Count: 20273
Published: Sep 01, 2006 Updated: Sep 01, 2006
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed
Date: Sep 14, 2006
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Ok, i can tell that you are younger than i am just cause of the way you wrote the smut scene...I think that you might want to drop this sort of story for a bit and come back to it in like a year or two. That way you have a more intamate knowledge of what is going on with it. I REALY like the part where Yumi gets in bed with Urich and describes him
"muscular, but gentle, firm, yet melted very easy, tough, but not so tough that he couldn't kiss her with fragile lips."
That would have to be the best part of the whole section.
Summary: Twins Cher Ami and Hope and their friends Alvan and Nichole, all think they are orphans. That changes however when the two are contacted on their 12th birthday in a way that leads them to a mysterious factory and the world of Lyoko. Now their past will unfold.
Categories: Ships >
Jeremie and Aelita,
Ships >
Ulrich and Yumi,
Ships >
Odd and Sissi,
Seasons >
Season 3 Characters: Aelita Hopper,
Jeremie Belpois,
Odd Della Robbia,
Ulrich Stern,
Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: Action/Adventure,
Comedy,
Drama,
GeneralWarnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed: No
Word count: 3511
Read Count: 9852
Published: Sep 16, 2006 Updated: Sep 16, 2006
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed 
Date: Sep 18, 2006
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
um, i think that you need to go over this a little more and tighten things up a bit. I like what is happening, but Cher Ami sounds more like a girls name then a boys name, and that confused me in the begining. and wasnt it Aelita that dropped the twins off? so how is she in Lyoko? good, but needs improvement 3.5 out of 5
Summary: Yumi’s having a bad day. Find out why. This is my first fic so I hope it is digestible.
Categories: Seasons Characters: Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: AngstWarnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed: Yes
Word count: 634
Read Count: 1973
Published: Sep 19, 2006 Updated: Sep 19, 2006
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed
Date: Sep 21, 2006
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
A very nice story for the first time...I think that you have a good amount of room for improvement, but we all do. :) good job
Summary: A new girl arrives at Kadic, and realizes she has feelings for Jeremie. Aelita has dreams of a girl that looks suspiciously like Kaitie, the new girl. Jeremie tries his best to keep his secret of Lyoko, and almost fails. Part of series
To Understand.
Categories: Seasons Characters: Aelita Hopper,
Jeremie Belpois,
Odd Della Robbia,
Ulrich Stern
Genres: GeneralWarnings: None
Series: To Understand
Chapters: 8
Completed: Yes
Word count: 1155
Read Count: 24321
Published: Sep 24, 2006 Updated: Oct 01, 2006
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed
Date: Oct 03, 2006
Title: Chapter 4: Will He?
good job so far, i personaly think that you have Aelita a little too outgoing. But that is probibly just me, good job!
Author's Response: Thanks, and please excuse it, because I don't really know how to play Aelita really well...
Summary: Ulrich has to learn to let it all out as something is happening to the CL Gang. Takes place after "The Key"
Categories: Seasons >
Season 3 Characters: Ulrich Stern
Genres: DramaWarnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed: Yes
Word count: 2422
Read Count: 18195
Published: Oct 05, 2006 Updated: Oct 05, 2006
Summary: She always wondered why she kept pushing him away until one night Hiroki opens her eyes. One-shot! WARNING: Takes place after "Straight to Heart" Minor spoilers inside!
Categories: Ships >
Ulrich and Yumi Characters: Hiroki Ishiyama,
Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: DramaWarnings: None
Challenges: Hidden Pain
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed: Yes
Word count: 892
Read Count: 1589
Published: Oct 29, 2006 Updated: Oct 29, 2006
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed
Date: Dec 26, 2006
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
This is a pritty good story, though i think that you could have had more to it. It shows the "inner workings" of Yumi that she oftan doesnt show.
All Total you recieve a 7/10 for this story
Summary: (Oneshot) Yumi is feeling all alone one night on the sidewalk...until Jeremie arrives.
Categories: Ships >
Jeremie and Yumi Characters: Jeremie Belpois,
Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: RomanceWarnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed: Yes
Word count: 766
Read Count: 1070
Published: Nov 05, 2006 Updated: Nov 05, 2006
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed
Date: Nov 06, 2006
Title: Chapter 1: Alone?
Well that was interesting, you put things in a way that most people dont realy see. Most people see jeremie and Yumi as a Brother~Sister relationship. But it would be one to suspect them to turn to the last person that they realy know in that situation. Good job. 8/10
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed
Date: Jun 01, 2007
Title: Chapter 3: Travels To Be a Savior
Good, but it could be better, i know how you work and you have a good mind. you need to put a little more thought into it though. I can see where you are going with this but in a way i cant....try and look at it as many ways that you can before you post, that way you dont leave anyone confused. 8/10
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed
Date: Apr 04, 2007
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Good job, i want to how you do once you're really going with your writing!
Summary: Don't read the story if you don't understand love!
Categories: Ships >
Other,
Seasons >
Post-Season 3 Characters: Aelita Hopper
Genres: DramaWarnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed: Yes
Word count: 647
Read Count: 1546
Published: Jun 03, 2007 Updated: Jun 03, 2007
Summary: What does Aelita dream of other than wolves and empty houses?
Categories: Ships >
Other,
Seasons >
Season 2 Characters: Aelita Hopper
Genres: PoetryWarnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed: Yes
Word count: 136
Read Count: 1265
Published: Jun 03, 2007 Updated: Jun 03, 2007
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed
Date: Jun 03, 2007
Title: Chapter 1: Dreaming
You have a good base, but you need to think a little more and add to it. I can see the poetry coming out in this, and like it, so try and make future ones longer kay?
8/10
Author's Response: Cool, I'll try.
