The Dimension's Monster

[The BB of C offline]

This story was originally hosted on the CODE: LYOKO official forum. I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.

What could this be? Aelita opens her door with the a destination of the showers in mind, when she finds a crying infant in her doorway. Not sure what to do, or hardly even what this was, she immidiately goes to the factory and calls for backup. Aelita's new female human instincts urge her to care for the infant. However, the rest of them dissagree and even talk of getting bad vibes from this baby. What will Aelita do, and what is the reason for the sudden appearance for it?

"CODE: LYOKO and the Dimension's Monster"

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

I don't get it.

[The BB of C offline]

What don't you get?

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

Why the gang would not let Aelita have the baby.

[The BB of C offline]

That's weird. I remember going out of my way in attempts of explaining why.
1) It wasn't hers.
2) The parents might come looking for it later.
3) She might not be able to handle the responsibility.
4) She would (financially) not be able to support it.

I remember putting in the characters listing all of that at one point or another.

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

Did'nt read the whole thing just the intro.

[The BB of C offline]

There you go with that making judgements before you know anything again.

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

Ok I read the first half of it and I Give it a 5.0 out of ten

[Darkborn offline]

....Read the whole thing before rating, jack@$$.

BBoC that was an awesome story! I liked it alot. 8/10

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

....Read the whole thing before rating, jack@$$.

BBoC that was an awesome story! I liked it alot. 8/10

Oh who asked you?

[Jeremified offline]

....Read the whole thing before rating, jack@$$.

BBoC that was an awesome story! I liked it alot. 8/10

Oh who aked you?

Before you try to put someone down with bad spelling and manners, let me just tell you that BBoC asked. Comments are good for stories, so you should try and comment on the entire story yourself.

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

<i>Post deleted by <b>RoDrInCuBuS</b>. Reason: spam.</i>

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

What did I do?

[MY85 offline]

What did I do?

1) You're spamming.
2) You're not behaving well, as stated around the topics you posted.
3) Keep breaking some rules, you will get banned.

Now, from this line, please make comments on the story that The BB of C has posted. End of spam, okay guys?

[The BB of C offline]

Agreed, Rodri.

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

Ok I read the rest of it and i raise my score.. 8.9

[Pika53 offline]

This was an interesting story to read and I really enjoyed it. If it's not much trouble, would you mind reviewing
my own story and letting me know what you think? It's still a work in progress, but every review helps.

[The BB of C offline]

What is the title of the story you would like me to read?

[Pika53 offline]

It's called Nocturne of Shadows. If you can think of any ideas for the begining of chap. #2 I'd really appreciate it.

[The BB of C offline]

I'll take a look at it. Though it is against my policy to give a writer ideas, I might private message you with something.

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

Pika, Pm me the story too,

[The BB of C offline]

First, promise that you won't just read the prolouge. That you'll read the whole thing and give a real response.

[lyokowarriorteen20010 offline]

Ok I promise on my dogs life..

[The BB of C offline]

Alright then, like Pika53 said, it's called "Nocturne of Shadows". I bumped it to the first page with my reply yesterday. I do recommend it to anyone reading this post.