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Star Way wrote:I liked it a lot! Good job!
I'll leave you a review and a favorite when I get home. Right now I'm in a hurry and on a dial-up connection, so yeah... heh.
Werwek wrote:Great job!!!
Just think that the last phrase is unnecesary....just the smile thing is enoough since the smile kinda leaves the moment in a romantic end, while the phrase makes it loose some significance, being a more regular ending
Alpha-Omega wrote:i agree with werwek, i think the last sentance made it lose some of the feeling
Samblob wrote:It also leads one to believe that this is not really the end of the story...
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