Date: May 25, 2008 07:41 PM Title: The Window
it was really good. you should really add more onto it. i know how Yumi feels...kinda filthy and used and stuff...it was really a cool story. i hope it all works out for her.
Date: May 25, 2008 06:57 PM Title: Chapter 3
you really could have left out some of the details with Yumi's dream and all...really.
Date: Jan 13, 2008 03:15 AM Title: Chapter 8
wen u gonna update next??? its really good so far!
Date: Sep 27, 2007 09:16 AM Title: Chapter 8
OMG I LUV THE DANCE.... THE SLAPPING WAS SO FUNNI :D
I WANT MORE.... I WANT MORE who r u?? can we hav more.....this is SO good.. its better than anything.... not too much "sexual acts" and quite funny too... i don't like the idea of odd and sissi.. thats just wrong because wan't she the villian?? ...but i don't mind now... all i wan't is for you to continue the story... :( pweeez?
Date: Sep 27, 2007 07:23 AM Title: Chapter 3
OMG!! odd and sissi!! gawd... i dunno what to say :S
Date: Sep 27, 2007 07:07 AM Title: Chapter 2
VERY nice... its SO good :D
[Report This]Date: Mar 17, 2007 08:27 PM Title: Chapter 8
OK thats it! i have been waiting and waiting... and you never finish the stupid story!!! Its been over a year and you cant even write 1 more chapter? Infact i got so board waiting that i continued the story in my head, and its good! Im just dissapointed and impatiant. Its to good of a story to just not finish.
[Report This]Date: Feb 14, 2007 12:32 PM Title: Chapter 8
Still spechless... BUT YOU MUST CONTINUE!!!
[Report This]Date: Jan 23, 2007 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 8
....wow....im spechles...
Date: Sep 25, 2006 02:31 PM Title: The Window
IF YOU KEEP GOING YOU CAN TURN THIS INTO A BEST SELLING ROMANCE NOVEL. EXCELLENT WORK!
Date: Sep 14, 2006 05:43 AM Title: Chapter 2
Ok, i can tell that you are younger than i am just cause of the way you wrote the smut scene...I think that you might want to drop this sort of story for a bit and come back to it in like a year or two. That way you have a more intamate knowledge of what is going on with it. I REALY like the part where Yumi gets in bed with Urich and describes him
"muscular, but gentle, firm, yet melted very easy, tough, but not so tough that he couldn't kiss her with fragile lips."
That would have to be the best part of the whole section.
[Report This]Date: Sep 04, 2006 04:21 PM Title: Chapter 8
The story so far is pretty good! Maybe just a little too lovey dovey! It's not completly realistic either! The characters need to be a bit more "in-character", but you've got Jeremie and Aelita down well! I give it a 7.5!
[Report This]Date: Sep 04, 2006 01:03 PM Title: Chapter 2
Heh heh.... that was an okay chapter, i think the best part was Yumi's dream...she saw her own father, that is too much. Keep up the good work! Not the best story I've read but..good enough!