[Report This]Date: May 22, 2008 05:44 AM Title: I Got My Game On
yay!!!
and ya i do wnt a 3rd fic/story about flora, maybe you know just showing her as part of thegroup in kadic, fightning xana, you know "normal" stff
Author's Response: Ok! It'll be K+ agen, too, so don't worry!
[Report This]Date: May 03, 2008 06:12 AM Title: I Got My Game On
well,i dont know him, but danny seeems to deserve it!
PS. Idle hands are
Devil's handy work”
Author's Response: Yay! Some body actlly lookd it up! I ment to write it in, but mabye it can fit some whre else...
[Report This]Date: Apr 14, 2008 04:27 PM Title: I Got My Game On
Stop being so critical on her spelling. It's obvious this chapter she either checked it herself and added in all the vowels or ran it through spell check. Not all the words are the words they're supposed to be, but there's no spelling mistakes.
Of COURSE Od is Odd. Hey, she gets Xana right. She spells Ulrich in a way that name can be spelled and Aelita is just one complicated vowel seizure with an 'l' and 't' thrown in.
I could critique your comment on spelling: "person", "purpose", "explanation", "warriors". (A worrier is someone who worries.)
But, I'm getting all hyped up over Soul's 'review' which is even in the wrong chapter.
Aging the Lyoko warriors! I don't think I've heard of that before. I was wondering how you were going to have kids investigate something going on in Sin City. Interesting development. And maybe some foreshadowing? I can imagine Yumi and Ulrich sneaking off during some free time...
Short, but inspired as usual. : )
I'll give you a 10, because you basically spelled their names right (or were just lucky and didn't have to spell the harder ones).
Author's Response:
Yumi & Ulrick might not be gettng much free time...too bad...XANA just has to get in the way...
Date: Apr 13, 2008 02:22 PM Title: I Got My Game On
Errrrr. First is Od a different peroson than Odd if not CHANGE IT! I even though I leave things out on perpouse what your doing is not giving any cryptic hints you just forgot to give any back story what so ever. You might want to give a bit of explination why there are 20 lyoko worriers.
Author's Response: I said they were 21 yers old, not that thre were more!
[Report This]Date: Apr 09, 2008 06:39 PM Title: I Got My Game On
Chapter 2!
I wouldn't call this filler; this is setting up the plot! So, Xana likes diamonds? Hmm... well, regardless, they're going to Vegas!
Hmm... it's far in the US, but they're crossing international borders...
I hope our boarding school students and their new friend are safe.
I want to know what happens next, please continue. And could I make a suggestion? Try and get the character names down next chapter. (Aelita, Odd, Ulrich) If you do, I'll give you another 5 stars. ; )
Author's Response: If you want what's next, it's a good thing I just loggd on to post the next chaptr!
[Report This]Date: Mar 30, 2008 06:46 PM Title: Sunrise
Not a bad story, not at all. I figured Flora would make her stay at Kadic, but the story was enjoyable to read and had some fun moments.
Author's Response:
Let's hope it stays fun!
Date: Mar 30, 2008 06:24 PM Title: Sunrise
The necklaces are... interesting. Everything else sounds good.
Author's Response: Thanks! They were gong to be brclts, but that's too simler to Ben 10. Not to mentn, very crul to Od & Ulrick...
[Report This]Date: Mar 30, 2008 06:09 PM Title: I Got My Game On
Well, if you want to be real picky, 'soul of legonds', Ulrick is spelled Ulrich, Ailta is spelled Aelita. Then there was mixing up 'fond' and 'found' and 'cold' and 'could'. However! I don't think someone should review solely on spelling... (And for the record, the spelling in your stories is improving.)
So far it's not bad. Your writing really has a nice flare or taste or something. It's 'fun' to read and not just some pointless self-insertion that only the author finds interesting. It's a little short for my taste, but what's there deserves 5/5 stars.
Author's Response: As some body who can't spell to save her own life, I complty agree with you! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Do you mind e-malng my techers & tellng them what you said abot spellng...
[Report This]Date: Mar 30, 2008 02:22 AM Title: I Got My Game On
yay, a sequel, love it
hahaha, leather, i didnt know that the skid has laether!? cool,
Author's Response: I didn't know ether, I just wantd to try & make a joke... It wold be relly nice if it did thogh...
Date: Mar 29, 2008 02:32 PM Title: I Got My Game On
OOOOOKKKAY? Odd is spelled Odd not Od, but not to bad
Author's Response: Thanks! The next chaptrs actlly have to do with the plot, so stay tund!
Date: Mar 20, 2008 07:18 PM Title: Sunrise
It's a very interesting piece so far. I find that you're creative. Five stars. =)
Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you stick arond for the next story!
[Report This]Date: Mar 18, 2008 02:04 AM Title: Sunrise
100 reviews? really, or are exageratin?
i loved this story
Author's Response:
Uh,no...over 100 vews. As in the # of times that peple have clckd on my story. I'm glad that I've had 2 fathfl revewrs thogh!
[Report This]Date: Mar 15, 2008 08:12 PM Title: Sunrise
Are you going to make a sequal?
Author's Response: Yep! See The Scence Behnd the Ficten for more info!
[Report This]Date: Mar 09, 2008 04:48 AM Title: Sunrise
yeah!!!!! flora joinning the lyoko warriors!!!! awesomenesssssssss, too many ssss hu? oh well you updated, finally, its a good ending, a bit of a cliffie though, is there a sequel? or is this not over yet, is all-american girl flora's fav song or something/
well theres my questions!!
c ya
Author's Response: Hmm...you shall see...you shall see...
[Report This]Date: Mar 04, 2008 05:58 PM Title: Sunrise
Yumi said "Flora-san"! I'm not sounding to weird saying most writers don't make Yumi sound a little more Japanese. I salute you for giving her more of a Japanese outlook.
OH, and please update! I love this story!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Since Flora & Yumi don't know each othr well, I figrd that Yumi wold use -san to addrss her. Note that she dosn't say Alita-san, as she is alrdy very close to Alita.
[Report This]Date: Feb 24, 2008 03:41 AM Title: Sunrise
ohh dont worry, ill remember that song, i have it on my mp3!!!!!!!!!!!! the songs got a ood story to it too!
Author's Response: I know, I love it! Just keep it in mind...
[Report This]Date: Feb 24, 2008 03:39 AM Title: Sunrise
woot woot!
she updated(ur a she right? cause only a girl can write this good lol)
awesome, cant wait, why does flora have a heart pendant! and where did the pendants come from anyways?????????
ohh well i gotta wait then!
Author's Response:
The pendnts? From Alita's pockt of corse! lol, you'll see what they're for soon...
Oh, & I'm a girl. Hence virtugirl.
Date: Feb 23, 2008 01:25 PM Title: Sunrise
Good story so far.
Author's Response: Thanks! The next chaptr shold be filld with acten...
[Report This]Date: Feb 17, 2008 03:04 AM Title: Sunrise
ohhh, and i love that song, and, i love this story,
thnx for finally updating, i might shout this story, to get you more readers!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I'm glad to see that sombdy likes my work engh to prmte it!
A tiny hint: Rember the song...
[Report This]Date: Feb 13, 2008 04:17 AM Title: Sunrise
wow, yes yumi-san came , tnx for updates 10/10 ;)
Author's Response: No prob! I'm glad that I have a fathfl revewr who is still stndng by me!