Reviews For What the gang will do..
Reviewer: Gravity Control Signed 
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Date: Nov 05, 2006 11:40 PM Title: Jeremy's family and Ulrich visit the United States
[Report This]Date: Nov 05, 2006 11:40 PM Title: Jeremy's family and Ulrich visit the United States
This story is a bit weird, I mean, since when did Sissi become chums with the group? And the donut thing? No matter. For some reason I can't stop reading this. I like it!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: Stonecreek Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 11, 2006 03:46 PM Title: Chapter 2
[Report This]Date: Oct 11, 2006 03:46 PM Title: Chapter 2
You have a storyline going, but you don't need to explain everything in such exacting detail. Nor do you need everyone to say the same thing on a seperate line. Just have them all say the same thing, as a group. I like your ideas, but the technique is just so flawed. Read a book on writing. You can do better.