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Reviewer: Sierra Silverstone Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 27, 2007 07:07 AM Title: Chapter 2
Date: Sep 27, 2007 07:07 AM Title: Chapter 2
VERY nice... its SO good :D
Reviewer: metrunui1 Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 14, 2006 05:43 AM Title: Chapter 2
Date: Sep 14, 2006 05:43 AM Title: Chapter 2
Ok, i can tell that you are younger than i am just cause of the way you wrote the smut scene...I think that you might want to drop this sort of story for a bit and come back to it in like a year or two. That way you have a more intamate knowledge of what is going on with it. I REALY like the part where Yumi gets in bed with Urich and describes him
"muscular, but gentle, firm, yet melted very easy, tough, but not so tough that he couldn't kiss her with fragile lips."
That would have to be the best part of the whole section.
Reviewer: RockyB Signed 
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Date: Sep 04, 2006 01:03 PM Title: Chapter 2
[Report This]Date: Sep 04, 2006 01:03 PM Title: Chapter 2
Heh heh.... that was an okay chapter, i think the best part was Yumi's dream...she saw her own father, that is too much. Keep up the good work! Not the best story I've read but..good enough!