Dude, I love your stories! You do it so real like! Though I have to watch out when I read it cause of that. I've fanted one too many times and when Jeremie is remembering his past it seems all to real. That's why it's so cool! Trop cool! Oh, and if you like things that are supsoted to happen in the latter years of the Lyoko warroirs, check out my stories once I've gotten Le Suivant Génération on here. You'd love it. à tout à la. See ya!

EEEEEEE...severe hints of JxS...-_-

Anyway, it seems okay, aside from said pairing I am trying not to notice. Not sure that even the adult Sissi would have that large a vocabulary, but it seems interesting.

As for Lyoko's new name, for some reason Terra Machina reminds me of a factory instead of a virtual world, but it's good.

I'm still completely in the dark of what is to happen next; I don't have any good guesses. If that's your intention, good job. If it's not...then uh oh. Although if it's not your intention, it's probably something on my part. -.-

Just please be careful not to stray too much from CL's original plot line. I understand that yes, this is the future and a new age, and much has changed since the end of the series, but straying too far from the usual plot and into unknown territory won't always keep your readers on track. You're doing a very good job with very good description, and you're making use of vocabulary, as well as staying true to Jeremie's character (as far as I can notice), but just be sure not to take the plot too far away from what most readers are comfortable with reading.

Just try to focus a bit more about the things we know most about, and what we're used to seeing and most familiar with: Lyoko/Terra Machina (now), and also Jeremie and the original characters. Inventing too many characters will have heads spinning...or mine, at least. x.x

As for the perspectives, I haven't been keeping track of them a lot, but just be sure not to use too many, because then it gets confusing.

But you've been doing a great job with detail and your plot, as well as staying true to a lot of the usual things, such as Jeremie's character. Keep up the good work.

It's still...slightly hard to stay on track...but great job. Can't think of anything to suggest or criticize, except to try and keep the plot straightforward. Although it could just be me. -.-

Nice fanfic. Good detail.

"Who appeared [i]board[/i]?"

I think you mean "bored". :P

I have to say that some bits are too chronological, because you should probably just say "a little while later" instead of making it almost completely time-based and saying "7 minutes later". It just seems too...well, unnaturally timed out.

Other than that, I think it's fine. Great chapter. :)

hahaha, man its sooo like the lyoko gang, xcept not sure where the 'yumi' figure fits in, and the history of jeremy can't wait

Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa, spelling is not my strong point. If i could just get dictaion back up.......

Ummm yes that would be because i haven't reavealed much of the plot. But its coming.

Chapter End Notes:

Shock, is it not? 

are you kidding, of course that was a shock!

**smacks 4head** 

oh, what was that all about? cant wait

Author's Response: The next chapter should give you a little more to think about, and posibly answere a few questions.