Date: Oct 09, 2006 04:35 PM Title: He hates her because he loves her
I almost wish I hadn't read this, because Masochist stands so well on its own. This fic is more troubling, and slightly less believable than the other one. Again, though, the thematic material is engrossing. IF you want a good movie on how violence can drive love, and the motivational factors of lust, check out the Korean film Samaria (Samaritan Girl). It sorta deals witht he same subject matter, and after reading this, I feel it might be up your alley.
But back to the fic. The other overlying problem here is I can't see Yumi in this characterization. She's almost too flawed to take seriously. The voice you write in though, smooths this over, sucks you in, and that is what makes you such a wonderful writer.