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Reviewer: trixter 93 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Feb 01, 2008 06:15 AM Title: Whispering Campaign

freaky, but i want more, please update, its..........ADDICTING,  what if aelita was involve, mmmmm?

Reviewer: Cybra Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Oct 31, 2006 02:22 PM Title: Whispering Campaign

I think the reason I like this is the whole yin and yang aspect of the pairing.  They're total and complete opposites, but Jeremy can give himself XANA's powers if he sits down and works it out (like activating the towers).  Plus XANA's habit of copying Jeremy multiple times in canon.  (Three times to date!)  They say imitation is the highest form of flattery.  Plus even though they're opposites, they're identical in the way that they're not usually on the front lines themselves, ordering their troops about on the battlefield of Lyoko.  In addition to that their determination and intellect is the same.  It kinda makes you all goosepimply.

But enough of my rambling!  This chapter was superbly written.  I love your characterization of XANA.  It's almost as if he's becoming a (if somewhat smarmy) human.  And I was shocked that he was actually offering to help.  Meanwhile Jeremy remains separated from the pack and constantly assaulted by his enemy.

I saw some minor grammar mistakes but not enough to really bother me until this sentence:

His eyes darting to XANA with bottled thoughts of bloody work. 

Maybe I'm just not on the ball today, but that sentence threw me for a loop and out of the moment.  On the whole though, great story.  Solid ten.

Reviewer: Kholdstare Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 29, 2006 08:22 PM Title: Brilliant Red

Wow, this was one of the most awesome reads I have ever, well, read! Abit confusing on one side, but really good on the whole. I loved the use of grammar and word choice in this one, really kept my interest. And the suspense of the situation really kept my eyes on the page. Really good, and sadistic!

Reviewer: Stonecreek Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Oct 23, 2006 07:05 AM Title: Brilliant Red

Not as technically sound as I'm used to seeing from you, but damn!  The concept is golden!  Try to fix the run-on sentences/sentence fragments; they're distracting from the unique characterizations of XANA and Jeremie.  It's a lot of fun seeing Jeremie squirm like this.  More soon, please.

Reviewer: Cybra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 22, 2006 09:37 PM Title: Brilliant Red

On the one hand, I know I should probably be creeped out by this fic.  On the other hand, I'm not and can actually see where it's coming from.  And I definitely want to see more.  Awesome job!

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