[Report This]Date: Oct 29, 2006 08:22 PM Title: Brilliant Red
Wow, this was one of the most awesome reads I have ever, well, read! Abit confusing on one side, but really good on the whole. I loved the use of grammar and word choice in this one, really kept my interest. And the suspense of the situation really kept my eyes on the page. Really good, and sadistic!
[Report This]Date: Oct 23, 2006 07:05 AM Title: Brilliant Red
Not as technically sound as I'm used to seeing from you, but damn! The concept is golden! Try to fix the run-on sentences/sentence fragments; they're distracting from the unique characterizations of XANA and Jeremie. It's a lot of fun seeing Jeremie squirm like this. More soon, please.
[Report This]Date: Oct 22, 2006 09:37 PM Title: Brilliant Red
On the one hand, I know I should probably be creeped out by this fic. On the other hand, I'm not and can actually see where it's coming from. And I definitely want to see more. Awesome job!