Wow, awesome fic! (Ooh, first time I wrote that, I made a typo and thus it became a very different sentence. xDD) But, yeah, I really like the way it's written... very poetic. I also like the way you capture the emotion so well; you give detail, but keep things as vague as they should be at the same time. It's a delicate balance, and you really know what you're doing. :) As for your question about whether or not slash is allowed here, I'm not 100% sure (ultimately the decision is Vchat's, but he's cool so, ehh). When he started this place, he said lemon was okay (for one thing), so I doubt this is a problem. (I'm into yaoi myself, so I certainly don't mind. ^^) Once again, great fic! Keep writing 'em! :D