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I've written fanfic for quite some time and am a major Jeremy fan(atic). A lot of stuff that isn't up here or on my fanfiction.net profile is up on my shared writing journal Candied Soup (linked above).
Categories: Ships > Other Characters: Jeremie Belpois
Genres: Angst, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed: No Word count: 1958 Read Count: 6951
Date: Oct 22, 2006 Title: Chapter 2: Brilliant Red
On the one hand, I know I should probably be creeped out by this fic. On the other hand, I'm not and can actually see where it's coming from. And I definitely want to see more. Awesome job!
Date: Oct 31, 2006 Title: Chapter 3: Whispering Campaign
I think the reason I like this is the whole yin and yang aspect of the pairing. They're total and complete opposites, but Jeremy can give himself XANA's powers if he sits down and works it out (like activating the towers). Plus XANA's habit of copying Jeremy multiple times in canon. (Three times to date!) They say imitation is the highest form of flattery. Plus even though they're opposites, they're identical in the way that they're not usually on the front lines themselves, ordering their troops about on the battlefield of Lyoko. In addition to that their determination and intellect is the same. It kinda makes you all goosepimply.
But enough of my rambling! This chapter was superbly written. I love your characterization of XANA. It's almost as if he's becoming a (if somewhat smarmy) human. And I was shocked that he was actually offering to help. Meanwhile Jeremy remains separated from the pack and constantly assaulted by his enemy.
I saw some minor grammar mistakes but not enough to really bother me until this sentence:
His eyes darting to XANA with bottled thoughts of bloody work.
Maybe I'm just not on the ball today, but that sentence threw me for a loop and out of the moment. On the whole though, great story. Solid ten.
Categories: Seasons, Seasons > Pre-Season 1, Ships > Other Characters: Aelita Hopper, Jeremie Belpois, Odd Della Robbia, Ulrich Stern, Yumi Ishiyama
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Comedy, Drama, General, Romance
Warnings: None
Challenges: A Difficult Challenge?!
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed: Yes Word count: 245 Read Count: 1405
Date: Mar 11, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: First it's here, Then it isn't.
Wow. That's really good! Short, sweet, and well-written. The only major problem I had was the occasional grammar mistakes like in this sentence:
"Well, Thanks, and uh, Bye Elizabeth."
"thanks" and "bye" shouldn't be capitalized. And "bye" should have a comma after it.
All in all, I did like it. :)