Ten Seconds- A Double Take Vignette (PG-K+)

[Carth]

At least, I think it's a vignette.

I finally got a LFF account like I should have a year ago, on account of writing this. I swear, I am too high on the Double Take cheek touch. This is a lil' transcript of what I think Yumi was thinking as that all was happening.

WARNING- Contains Double Take spoilers and a pairing that will make staunch UxY supporters go insane.

http://codexana.net/lyokofreak/lff/view ... hp?sid=241

[Taelia offline]

Awww.

Check out my AU thread in the Fics forum, Carth. I think you'd enjoy what I have so far.

http://codexana.net/lyokofreak/forum/viewtopic.php?t=4929

Based on reading your fic, I can guess that XANA is attracted to any young female (i.e., supervillain wants a queen to rule with, blah blah blah). This is a beautiful fic though. Maybe you can help me with mine.

[Gauntlet offline]

I like the description you used--both for William/XANA, his touch, and Yumi's thoughts and feelings. I'm glad you put in that sense of conflict for Yumi, too; it made her seem much more dimensional.

I can't think of much to critic, though.

[Rail Runner offline]

Wow, that definitely made Yumi seem more...thoughtful and more outspoken so to speak when it comes to what she is thinking. Awesome Carth.

[Taelia offline]

So you too think XANA know has a worldly form too, Carth?

[Carth]

Maybe. He's at least in something that can come and go from Lyoko and Earth as he pleases and still be ignored on the street. =D

Thanks for the opinions, guys! I'm a happy person now.

I've also set up an FF.net link- http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3583831/1/.

[Taelia offline]

Keep up the good work. Will you help me with my fics sometime?