I know this isn't really good, but can someone check it out?
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2607746/1/
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by SamBlob » Thu Oct 06, 2005 8:45 pm
I R&R'd, but I'm not sure it went through.
It's thin, though.
It's thin, though.
My LF family:
Mother: StarWay
FairlyOddSister: CBIzumi
Awesome little sister: Mewberries151
Big sister with whom I often quarrel: Linii-chan
Mad scientist little brother: X1
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Keeper of heraldic arms: Doggiegal (actually, I do my own coat of arms now...)
all welcome in Room#420
Mother: StarWay
FairlyOddSister: CBIzumi
Awesome little sister: Mewberries151
Big sister with whom I often quarrel: Linii-chan
Mad scientist little brother: X1
Favourite cousin: Ransomed_Heart
Keeper of heraldic arms: Doggiegal (actually, I do my own coat of arms now...)
all welcome in Room#420
by Skysong » Thu Oct 06, 2005 9:05 pm
Ok, here's what I think- this fic is good... in theory.
But when you've got faaar more song lyrics in your fic than actual ficcage, my dear, you have a problem.
If you're like me and you skip past the song lyrics to find the actual fic... you miss it all.
The writing itself was pretty good, but stretched too thin, like Samblob said.
But when you've got faaar more song lyrics in your fic than actual ficcage, my dear, you have a problem.
If you're like me and you skip past the song lyrics to find the actual fic... you miss it all.
The writing itself was pretty good, but stretched too thin, like Samblob said.
Mistress of madness and all that jazz. FFN account DA account
Panel from Wild Child 'cause the nosekiss was getting too weird.
Panel from Wild Child 'cause the nosekiss was getting too weird.
by Saphire-089 » Fri Oct 07, 2005 4:29 pm
Not to sound desperate, immature or anything, but What do you think of this compared to my recent one (I didn't just make this one up, it was done in august or september.)
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2532720/1/
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2532720/1/
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by SamBlob » Fri Oct 07, 2005 7:18 pm
More expressive than 24/7, but still thin.
My LF family:
Mother: StarWay
FairlyOddSister: CBIzumi
Awesome little sister: Mewberries151
Big sister with whom I often quarrel: Linii-chan
Mad scientist little brother: X1
Favourite cousin: Ransomed_Heart
Keeper of heraldic arms: Doggiegal (actually, I do my own coat of arms now...)
all welcome in Room#420
Mother: StarWay
FairlyOddSister: CBIzumi
Awesome little sister: Mewberries151
Big sister with whom I often quarrel: Linii-chan
Mad scientist little brother: X1
Favourite cousin: Ransomed_Heart
Keeper of heraldic arms: Doggiegal (actually, I do my own coat of arms now...)
all welcome in Room#420
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by Saphire-089 » Wed Oct 12, 2005 8:57 pm
SamBlob wrote:More expressive than 24/7, but still thin.
Well it's better. I only have 3 fics up, and they're only one-shots.
*Avatar was made by deviant art user rinrinyan
by Skysong » Thu Oct 13, 2005 12:01 pm
It's still... off somehow... it *is* better than 24/7, but I still think you need more practice.
Mistress of madness and all that jazz. FFN account DA account
Panel from Wild Child 'cause the nosekiss was getting too weird.
Panel from Wild Child 'cause the nosekiss was getting too weird.
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