Date: Dec 02, 2008 04:33 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this was great! You made one grammar mistake, when Hiroki said 'Was that you're boyfriend, Ulrich?' it should be 'Was that your boyfriend, Ulrich?' because it's a possessive instead of a contraction.
Otherwise, great! 10/10.
Date: Nov 04, 2006 05:19 PM Title: Chapter 1
I like this fic because it really stays in touch with Yumi's character throughout. The only negative comment I have is that, for a oneshot, it could have ben a bit longer, but otherwise, this is great reading material, and keep up the good work.